The imagery could use some more work, at times it relies too heavily on abstract concepts, at times it feels too clichéd (such as on the very first line). One thing that's really missing is description and detail, those would give the poem the needed boost. The ending stanza sounds good, it's abstract and puzzling but I still can't help liking it. The title is quite nice too.

The flow could also use some improvement, the poem doesn't seem to progress from a beginning to an end, but often strays aside, it doesn't sound entirely coherent or refined. Some lines don't seem connected enough with the previous line(s), such as "Am I in the middle of an experiment?" The fourth stanza as a whole seems out of place to me.

In general the poem gives a feeling that you focused on every word and line, but forgot the entity. You could use more variation in the sentence structure. One thing that would probably improve the flow is using more commas in place of periods and not capitalizing the beginning of every line.

i like it bu7t i reeeally like

Whispered words don’t reassure me,
They merely make me freeze.
Each tear is entangled in raindrops < That part its my fav lovely job dear

Oh..crap...reminds me of something I wrote and never finished.

"Whispered words don’t reassure me,
They merely make me freeze."

I wrote:

"whisper words, whisper words
do you mean them?
carve it in, memorize"

I like your's much better. I just noticed the person above me stole my two lines, oh weeell! Just proves that you rule. *applauds you*

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So fragile..yet so devious.

hehe thanks beautiful. this is proving to be a very good relationship. you applaud me and thus i do the same back. but it's simultaneous i'm not just doing it cos you love me...

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im not o fucking kay

i liked that line too.. each tear is entangled in raindrops.. cos wet weather makes me sad. i was so appalled yesterday.. it's one of those things where you love it until it comes and then even if you were to force yourself to enjoy it your head just swaps it over for sadness and thus tears well.

by the way.. thankyou!

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im not o fucking kay

no problem ! yeh rain makes me blah to

Haha.

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So fragile..yet so devious.

yeah u also dont know whether happiness or sadness is the mood of the moment?

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im not o fucking kay

true